[FIC] "You First, Loser" Open Concrit Post

[gentlehag]

It's that time again. harrydracompreg did the big reveal on Sunday and so we all know that I'm the one responsible for the fact that Harry and Draco may or may not have named their daughters Lucissa and Lily James. For which I do not apologize.

This is the post where you are free to give me constructive criticism on this story and/or my writing in general, and it will be welcomed.

Title: You First, Loser (fest page) or on AO3
Word Count/Art Medium: 6,300
Rating: Hard R
Contains: Bad bets, good Malfoys, new parent panicking, and Harry’s permanent hard-on for Draco
Notes: Thank you to firethesound for the last minute beta! <3
Summary: When Harry and Draco’s “not serious” three-year relationship results in a one-in-a-million pregnancy, they decide who will be the unlucky one to tell their families in a very mature and adult way that indubitably proves their stellar parenting abilities: with a bet over a (probably rigged, let’s be real; Draco is playing) game of Exploding Snap.

Comments

[sophie-french.livejournal.com]

Sorry, like I said in my comment, I've loved every single word of it, so I'm not really be constructive here! :P
That was so funny, and I could so much imagine them behaving like that!
Thank you for writing this! ♥

[zeitgeistic.livejournal.com]

Thanks, Sophie!

[ragnarok-08.livejournal.com]

I really loved this :D

[zeitgeistic.livejournal.com]

Thank you :)

[eidheann_writes]

Concrit: Write moar mpreg plz :D

[zeitgeistic.livejournal.com]

I will write mpreg for you again ;)

[zeitgeistic.livejournal.com]

No worries. Not usually my thing, but I wrote it for a friend.

[zeitgeistic.livejournal.com]

I'm not actually a huge mpreg fan either. I think I really have to be in a mood for it. I think that's how i prefer my mpreg fics, too, so that's awesome that we're on that wavelength!

[awakenyourfaith.livejournal.com]

So in character, and so funny. I love it!

[zeitgeistic.livejournal.com]

<3<3